Tuesday, May 1, 2007

Assignment 6b

Assignment 6b
One Lucky Guy
Driving to pick Samantha up, Jake found himself nervous. Head cheerleader, vice president of student government and one of the coolest junior girls in school actually said yes to the second string, JV quarterback sophomore. Jake felt like the luckiest guy on earth, but that him even more nervous.
Palms sweaty and his heart beating fast, he turned the final corner on to her street. The walk to her front door seemed endless. Jake found his legs wanting to stay cemented to the concrete, but he took one step at a time and soon found himself in front of her door. Carved jack-o-lanterns witches with huge moles on their noses decorated the house. The house reminded Jake he still needed a costume for the Halloween dance in two weeks.
He took a deep breath, raised his pointer finger and pressed the illuminated doorbell button. Jake tried to glance through the windows surrounding the door, but stopped after fearing he looked like a peeping tom. A few minutes, what seemed like an eternity then, went by and Jake pondered if he should ring once again. Just then the door opened and a middle-aged woman answered the door. She wore jeans and a white collared shirt with a pin of a black and orange pumpkin placed near her heart.
The woman introduced herself as Karen. She invited Jake into the house and led him to the kitchen. She pulled a chair from the kitchen table and told Jake to have a seat, she would tell Samantha he arrived. While sitting in the kitchen Jake glanced around the room. Pictures, magnets, certificates, and second grade artwork covered the fridge. Jake could smell the aroma of an apple pie cooking in the oven and it made him hungry and excited. If he guessed correctly, he could look forward to a slice of pie to go. But to Jake’s disappointment, when he investigated the kitchen further, he noticed an apple pie scented Glade candle sitting on the counter. He laughed to himself because his mom did the same thing.
Jake glanced at his watch and saw it read 7:42pm. He reserved a table at an Italian restaurant downtown for eight o’clock. Just as he began to get comfortable, he heard a familiar voice say hello. He looked up and there stood Samantha looking more beautiful than ever before. She wore an olive green dress that complimented her hazel eyes. Each of her soft auburn curls lay perfectly in place. She dressed up her face with only mascara and blush. Jake loved that about Samantha. She never wore a lot of make-up. She didn’t have to because of her flawless olive skin. She smiled at Jake and her smiled revealed the dimples Samantha never liked, but she knew Jake loved.
Jake thanked the chair for holding him up, because Samantha had the ability to sweep him off his feet. He stood up and gave Samantha a delicate hug. Jake couldn’t help but notice how incredible she smelt, the perfect mixture of shampoo and perfume. When the hug ended Samantha surprised Jake by interlocking her fingers with his making his knees weak. If only the chair could help him one more time.
She guided him through the house to the front door. He thanked his lucky stars she knew her way around the house. He found himself too beauty struck to remember the way he came into the house. She opened the door and this made Jake regret not remembering to do that for her. They walked down the brick pathway toward his mom’s station wagon Volvo and Jake made sure not to mess up this time. He walked in front of her and opened the door. She smiled at him and used his hand to steady herself into his car. He hurried around the car and slid into the driver’s seat. He started the engine and took one more look at Samantha causing her to blush. He took a deep breath and turned the key to start the engine, forgetting he already completed this step. His mistake made an ugly noise that would have normally embarrassed Jake, but he wouldn’t let that ruin his night. The prettiest girl in school said yes to Jake, and that made him smile from ear to ear.

1 comment:

Digital Journalism @ CPSU said...

Good story. You succeeded in incorporating all the senses.

One usage mistake: "Jake couldn’t help but notice how incredible she smelt" (smelled ;)

GRADE: 9/10